Dhruv loves literature and often posts his work on the net, but nobody ever reads them. He is also into photography and he handles their wedding photos. He loves her very much. Likewise with her. She has a quick temper and always bullies him. He is a gentleman and always gives in to her.His philosophy - What's love without a bit of spice.
Location - Dhruv and Akshyata's bedroom.
A: "Why can't you be the photographer for my friend's wedding? She promised she'd pay."
D: "I don't have time that day."
A: "Humph!"
D: "Huh?"
A: "Don't have time? Write less of those novels, and you will have all the time you need."
D: "I... someone will definitely recognize my work some day."
A: "Humph! I don't care, you'll have to do it for her!"
D: "No."
A: "Just this once?"
D: "No."
Negotiation's broken. So, she gave the final warning: "Give me a Yes within three days, or else..."
First day, she "withheld" the kitchen, bathroom, computer, refrigerator, television, hi-fi... Except the double bed, to show her "benevolence".
Of course, she has to sleep on it too. He didn't mind, as he still has some cash in his pockets.
Second day, she conducted a raid and removed everything from his pockets and warned, "Seek any external help, and you bear the consequences."
He's nervous now. That night, on the bed, he begs for mercy, hoping that she'll end this state. She doesn't give a damn. No way am I giving in, whatever he says. Until he agrees.
Third day, night. On the bed. He's lying on the bed, looking to one side. She's lying on the bed, looking to the other side.
D: "We need to talk."
A: "Unless it's about the wedding, forget it."
D: "It's something very important."
She remains silent.
D:"Let's get a divorce."
She did not believe her ears.
D: "I got to know a girl."
She's totally angry, and wanted to hit him. But she held it down, wanting to let him finish. But her eyes already felt wet. He took a photo out from his chest. Probably from his undershirt pocket, that's the only place she didn't go through yesterday. How careless.
D: "She's a nice girl."
Her tears fell.
D: "She has a good personality too."
She's heartbroken because he puts a photo of some other girl close to his heart.
D: "She says that she'll support me fully in my pursue for literature after we got married."
She's very jealous because she said the same thing in the past.
D: "She loves me truly."
She wishes to sit up and scream at him "Don't I?"
D: "So, I think she won't force me to do something that I don't want to do."
She's thinking, but the rage won't subside.
D: "Want to take a look at the photo I took for her?"
A: "...!"
He brings the photo before her eyes. She's in a total rage, hits his hand away and leaves a burning slap on his face.
He turns off the light, and sleeps. She turns on the light, and sits up. He's asleep. She lost sleep. She regrets treating him the way she treated him.
She cried again, and thought about a lot of things. She wants to wake him up. She wants to have a intimate talk with him. She doesn't want to push him anymore. She stares at his chest. She wants to see how the girl looks.
She slips the photo out. She wanted to cry but started smiling.
It's a nicely taken photo. A photo he took for her. She bends down, and kissed him on his cheek.
He smiled. He was just pretending to be asleep.
He turned,their eyes met and there was silence.Niether of them said anything.Love doesn't need to be discussed;it has its own voice and speaks for itself.Her heart had listened closely to what his had said,and now it was content.
They closed their eyes and kissed.
"You learn to love, not by finding a perfect person, but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly."
The moral is very true...
ReplyDeleteCudos to your presentation style..even if we can guess the ending, we cant stop reading it till the end !!
Thanks Pritam
ReplyDeleteTrue love can have only one ending:-)
It's a nice one,,,
ReplyDeleteI loved these lines..."Love doesn't need to be discussed;it has its own voice and speaks for itself.Her heart had listened closely to what his had said,and now it was content."...so true..
good attempt...
Thanks Jayeeta,I'm so happy you loved it.
ReplyDeleteIts a very Nice story with true meaning of Love...
ReplyDeleteAnd a very good presentation that feels that I am watching it
Keep it up...
Thanks Ruby,
ReplyDeleteThe other day Pritam was talkin to me and said -"You know what I like best about your writing?"
"While reading we feel we are living the characters."
Thanks Pritam and Ruby
Well i would like to mention a few things...
ReplyDelete1. I really liked few observations and ornamentation of language..
//The earth was alive and the drops from above brought the miracles of heaven with them.We were all a part of that same miracle.//
//If she's not there,you feel like an addict who can't get a fix.And just as addicts steal and humiliate themselves to get what they need,you're willing to do anything for love.//
2.The plot was good.
Now few recommendations...
1.In the first few stanzas the narrator changes abruptly creating a little confusion.
2.The reason of quarrel could have been a little more mature /stronger....is what i feel.
3.The flow should have been a bit more smoother.....i wanted to know more of Dhruv and Akshyata.
Nywys....kudos for coming up a nice writeup!!!!
Thanks Priyanka or taking out the time to read my posts.I'm glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteWell i'v got some real mushophobic followers who insisted on read some real cute stuff.So this is for them...moreover,when it comes to love,the child within us talks...so maturity is out of the question.
I have read the story and it feels a very refreshing tale on a lazy sunday sipping a tea and watching the rain fall.. reading ur story will be absolute bliss at that moment.. :)
ReplyDeleteMy high point of the story
//'ve been in love before.It's like a narcotic.At first it brings the euphoria of complete surrender.The next day,you want more.You're not addicted yet,but you like the sensation,and you think you can still control things.You think about the person you love for two minutes,and forget them for two hours.But then you get used to that person and you begin to be completely dependant on them.Now you think about her for two hours and forget her for two minutes.If she's not there,you feel like an addict who can't get a fix.And just as addicts steal and humiliate themselves to get what they need,you're willing to do anything for love.//
Absolute magic is this para.. :)
wow....very touching story.....
ReplyDeleteThanks Anonymous
ReplyDeleteGood one and the ending of the story is very sweet...:)
ReplyDeleteI liked that 'line of love' that says 'you think about the person you love for two minutes,and forget them for two hours.But then you get used to that person and you begin to be completely dependant on them.Now you think about her for two hours and forget her for two miutes.if she is not there,you feel like an addict who can't get a fix.'.. this feeling is so pure..and true..
But I wanted to know more about Dhruv and Akshayata